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ozz665 · 07-10-2009, 01:01 AM

ok first off yes the name sucks balls ok onto roplay

the year is 2120 goverment has fallen.And the citzens are fed up.Goverment trying to control all things.from going to store to cooking your meals.You jsut got new of a fellow friend in dire need of help.

ok i know story sucks but unto game shall we.

ok you got sides

total anarchy
are goverment

total anarchy uses what they can get there hands on from a simple led pipe to a stolen gun from a cop

goverment has set weps and rules. goverment weps goverment armor and goverment rules.

my side is total anarchy.

it 12 past night.i can fill the rain drip on my shoes.as i tie them slowey.I can hear foot steps.Slow but long foot steps.I pull out my Beretta 92 and point it towerds the sound.i steady my self.ready my self.i see it get closer and closer. and then i here the tick tick tick. its a goverment agent trying to sneak up to me i turn and point it to him. and ask <...... this is for the gover agents part. put what you want as lnog as it fits.

Pixel.Hero · 07-10-2009, 01:54 AM

i don't want to come across as being mean but you really need to spell check your posts, i had a hard time understanding some of your sentences just by little mistakes you had made

e.g. "ok you got sides total anarchy are goverment"

it wasn't until i read the next sentence i realised "are" was supposed to be "and".

using good spelling and grammar make it alot easier for everyone.

Pixel"

dethharpist · 07-10-2009, 02:40 AM

((Let me take a crack at making this a tad bit better.))

First off, Yes I know the name isn't great.

The year is 2010 the government has taken over completely from morn to dusk, you and a few of you companions are tired of the all controlling government. You have heard of a resistance group calling themselves Total Anarchy.

You have a choice between part of this all controlling government or you can be part the group that will lead a rebellion, Total Anarchy.

Total Anarchy is still a small newly founded group so everything they use to fight will have been scavenged.

The government being as powerful as it is has any weapon they wish.

I chose to be part of Total Anarchy.

It 12 past night. I can feel the rain drops on my shoes, as I tie them slowly. I can hear foot steps,slow but long foot steps. I pull out my Beretta 92 and point it towards the sound. I steady my self, ready my gun. I see it get closer and closer and then I hear the tick tock tick. It's a government agent trying to sneak up to me, I turn and point it to him. and ask.......
(This is for a government agent to put as their first post, put whatever you want as long as it fits with the story)

((Jesus Christ I had to rewrite almost everything! Have you never head of grammar?!? Or even basic spelling and spell check?!?))

ozz665 · 07-10-2009, 02:59 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by dethharpist

((Let me take a crack at making this a tad bit better.))

First off, Yes I know the name isn't great.

The year is 2010 the government has taken over completely from morn to dusk, you and a few of you companions are tired of the all controlling government. You have heard of a resistance group calling themselves Total Anarchy.

You have a choice between part of this all controlling government or you can be part the group that will lead a rebellion, Total Anarchy.

Total Anarchy is still a small newly founded group so everything they use to fight will have been scavenged.

The government being as powerful as it is has any weapon they wish.

I chose to be part of Total Anarchy.

It 12 past night. I can feel the rain drops on my shoes, as I tie them slowly. I can hear foot steps,slow but long foot steps. I pull out my Beretta 92 and point it towards the sound. I steady my self, ready my gun. I see it get closer and closer and then I hear the tick tock tick. It's a government agent trying to sneak up to me, I turn and point it to him. and ask.......
(This is for a government agent to put as their first post, put whatever you want as long as it fits with the story)

((Jesus Christ I had to rewrite almost everything! Have you never head of grammar?!? Or even basic spelling and spell check?!?))

thank you man so much im sorry for you to have to rewrite the whole thing
im trying with my grammer. im goona useing my fire fox as it as spell check i belive ty agan though <3 ♥

dethharpist · 07-10-2009, 03:01 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by ozz665

thank you man so much im sorry for you to have to rewrite the whole thing
I'm trying with my grammar. I'm gonna use my fire fox as it as spell check i believe ty again though <3 ♥

Is English your second language, if not what grade are you in?

ozz665 · 07-10-2009, 03:27 AM

english is my first
but im in a pre ged thing
as well school and me = bad combo
no one liked me and the work i coudent do
math is a nono
reading is soso i can read some most of all basic but other is a nono
and my spelling and gramer as you can see sucks ..............

but yea they got me in pre ged cause of this same thing lol

its online aslo so no one pick on me at least not there

dethharpist · 07-10-2009, 03:38 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by ozz665

english is my first
but im in a pre ged thing
as well school and me = bad combo
no one liked me and the work i coudent do
math is a nono
reading is soso i can read some most of all basic but other is a nono
and my spelling and gramer as you can see sucks ..............

but yea they got me in pre ged cause of this same thing lol

its online aslo so no one pick on me at least not there

No we will still pick on you and possibly ignore you if you keep up this quality of writing. Trust me I'm not even out of high school but my writing skills are still pretty good and up to par with the other members on this board. No offense but I don't think you should really role play until your spelling and grammar are better, if you aren't going to wait at least plan out your posts VERY well ahead before you post them. No one likes to rp with someone who they can't even understand.

07-10-2009, 01:01 AM	#1 (permalink)
ozz665 Banned Join Date: Jul 2009 Posts: 10 Reputation: 11	nolands ok first off yes the name sucks balls ok onto roplay the year is 2120 goverment has fallen.And the citzens are fed up.Goverment trying to control all things.from going to store to cooking your meals.You jsut got new of a fellow friend in dire need of help. ok i know story sucks but unto game shall we. ok you got sides total anarchy are goverment total anarchy uses what they can get there hands on from a simple led pipe to a stolen gun from a cop goverment has set weps and rules. goverment weps goverment armor and goverment rules. my side is total anarchy. it 12 past night.i can fill the rain drip on my shoes.as i tie them slowey.I can hear foot steps.Slow but long foot steps.I pull out my Beretta 92 and point it towerds the sound.i steady my self.ready my self.i see it get closer and closer. and then i here the tick tick tick. its a goverment agent trying to sneak up to me i turn and point it to him. and ask <...... this is for the gover agents part. put what you want as lnog as it fits.

07-10-2009, 01:54 AM	#2 (permalink)
Pixel.Hero Marios's Mustache Wax Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: England, UK. Posts: 4 Reputation: 10	i don't want to come across as being mean but you really need to spell check your posts, i had a hard time understanding some of your sentences just by little mistakes you had made e.g. "ok you got sides total anarchy are goverment" it wasn't until i read the next sentence i realised "are" was supposed to be "and". using good spelling and grammar make it alot easier for everyone. Pixel" __________________ In the practice of tolerance, one's enemy is the best teacher. - Dalai Lama Logic will get you from A to B. Imagination will take you everywhere. - Albert Einstein I am the wisest man alive, for I know one thing, and that is that I know nothing. - Socrates

07-10-2009, 02:40 AM	#3 (permalink)
dethharpist Spyro’s Burning Cough Join Date: Jul 2008 Location: Behind you, hello. Posts: 531 Reputation: 10	((Let me take a crack at making this a tad bit better.)) First off, Yes I know the name isn't great. The year is 2010 the government has taken over completely from morn to dusk, you and a few of you companions are tired of the all controlling government. You have heard of a resistance group calling themselves Total Anarchy. You have a choice between part of this all controlling government or you can be part the group that will lead a rebellion, Total Anarchy. Total Anarchy is still a small newly founded group so everything they use to fight will have been scavenged. The government being as powerful as it is has any weapon they wish. I chose to be part of Total Anarchy. It 12 past night. I can feel the rain drops on my shoes, as I tie them slowly. I can hear foot steps,slow but long foot steps. I pull out my Beretta 92 and point it towards the sound. I steady my self, ready my gun. I see it get closer and closer and then I hear the tick tock tick. It's a government agent trying to sneak up to me, I turn and point it to him. and ask....... (This is for a government agent to put as their first post, put whatever you want as long as it fits with the story) ((Jesus Christ I had to rewrite almost everything! Have you never head of grammar?!? Or even basic spelling and spell check?!?)) __________________ Click here to feed me a Treat! Get your own at Pokeplushies! Click here to feed me a Small Creature! Get your own at Pokeplushies!

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07-10-2009, 03:27 AM	#6 (permalink)
ozz665 Banned Join Date: Jul 2009 Posts: 10 Reputation: 11	english is my first but im in a pre ged thing as well school and me = bad combo no one liked me and the work i coudent do math is a nono reading is soso i can read some most of all basic but other is a nono and my spelling and gramer as you can see sucks .............. but yea they got me in pre ged cause of this same thing lol its online aslo so no one pick on me at least not there