((OK, you did good, but there is one thing I am still questioning. The vault seems a tad too much, and I don't know if Ridley would approve of it. I'll talk to him and confirm it. Keep it that way for now, but if I later PM you about it, you're going to have to change it. Sorry, but it's the rules.))
EDIT: ((As I went over your post again, I ran into something else that is troubling me. On your third planet, the one with the evil on it, you never described what kind of place it was. You didn't even attempt to show what the planet even looks like, not to mention it's inhabitants. Sorry if this seems a little harsh, but can you change it?))
((P.S. Everything I'm telling him right now, also goes for everyone else.))
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An AIM conversation between Jakuza and me:
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xelpherpol (12:10:44 AM): Like...friends with a little more thrown in ^_^
Azn Boi E L i X (12:12:58 AM): friends with benefits
Azn Boi E L i X (12:13:00 AM): as they say.
xelpherpol (12:11:26 AM): Yeah, but that's a manipulative phrase, I like to refer to it as "We're friends, but I want sex now *****"
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