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Originally Posted by Kratos'girl
Link ran swiftly into shadow's dungeon and sliced one of shadow's guards throat."Sorry it took me so long, Serinity.I was caught up in something."He said to a girl that was tied up on a pole in the center of the room."Think fast,Link,"Shadow said,taking a bow and arrow out and aiming it at Serinity's heart.TWANG!The arrow was released and Link dashed in front of Serinity,his back facing the arrow."Why,Link?Why?"Serinity asked,tears now in her eyes."Simply because I love you,"Link replied.SMACK!The arrow hit Link and he fell to the ground,Dead.Shadow laughed evily and Sernity ripped through her chains and ripped his heart out.He too,fell to the ground,Dead.
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(( Even though the mod said only post things containing content, ill comment on that anyway
Nice bit of writeing, but your grammar could use a bit of work. try and space it out a bit. Character dialouge is usally started on a new line like this:
"Hi" Arthas Said
"Oh, hey." Replyed Garon
Because it makes it easyer to read, allso after a commer there is usally a space before the continueing sentance. Same goes for full-stops, you have good potentiol mate but the grammar makes your writeing hard to read. ))