Made a new account as i rarely listen to hardcore music now. So made a new account for my trys at psytrance and etc. This took me some time and i do know it is not the best. As the demo of fl studio is very limited. The bassline i made my self i know it sucks the kicks from free psytrance kick pack i found same with the hi hats close hats and other sounds.
Hahaha. I liked the first 50 seconds. And the thread title.
And I like the thumps at 1:13
Started getting bored at 1:33
You know, what some classical composers do is they'll write umm... They exposition each beat individually, change the timbre and rhythm a bit, and then show-off the next beat. And then at the end of the piece the recap all the beats simultaneously in harmony.
I like how you attempted to add a high-pitched melody in the background. But it sounded squeaky.
4:54 to 5:08 was kinda interesting. And then you fade-out nicely.
Hmm... It's a LOT better than your previous works.
Count when the drum patterns change, the drops happen, etc. The way it's done in the example is the normal techno or house pattern, which works well for electronic 4/4 dance music. This means a change every 8 bars, for anything that follows the idea of a techno like vibe and flow. Exceptions are very very stand-out and can't happen without very good reason.
Other than that, your first baseline was ok and actually sounded like music and the original drum pattern was decent, all the tries at changing that drums where pretty bad though at times.
If I where you, for practice, I'd stick to building the meat of the song first. That means building each 8-bar segment that loops out, before accentuating the transitions in any way. I have the feeling you went with an idea for 2 bars sometimes, after that trashed it, because it was rubbish, especially with the drums. You can't do that. If it's not good enough to loop it, trash it. If there is nothing to accentuate, you can't force it out of thin air. That's why you should get an idea of the "meat" part first (idea? well I said build the entire track and I mean it), add in fitting accents for the different moods later. You'll need to develop your intuition before you can do a formless approach and that will be easier by using a system based approach.