Befram
Sonic’s Milkshake

Hey...

What happened to the group? Do you know? I mean, I know I was gone for awhile, but...

I can't believe so much has changed....

At least with MSN or hotmail, I wouldn't delay conversing with everyone so long. Sorry for the long wait. Yeah, at least if you post visitor messages, the conversation is right there to refer to, while chats on MSN or hotmail would progress too fast. O.O Sorry for all the messages. Takesh and I are just so chatty.

Well, I think I gave you awhile of thinking. That, or I took too long, and all your ideas are gone. :O

Roll to Dodge has updated again! Please keep posting!

I'm lucky that I have a GPS, because without it, I'd be lost (of course, with it, I get lost if I don't know the specific location). Well, when I get lost, I just head back home. Night's the scariest time to get lost, though.

Yup! But, sadly, this little box won't fit much in it. Thus, Takesh and I end up with so many messages to each other. *sigh* It's been a few days since I replied, and yet I'm more tired than ever, which is a shame, since I'm on spring break. :/

Sorry, Befram. I'm slow with replies. xD Eh, if you like having so few messages, I won't harass you, but the more messages, the more lively your VMs become. So, don't fear the VMs.

Ah, no problem. As the saying goes, practice makes perfect. Of course, there is also the saying that nothing is perfect, but meh. :O I have a poor sense of direction as well, which is why I use a GPS whenever I'm driving. But, well, poor memory (such as mine) can be overcome (to an extent) by repetition.

Again, no problem. Perhaps we can chat about other things in the future as well.

B-man ya old sonova ******!

Naw man, instead of stroking some random white cat, you'd be stroking a *****.. cat! HA! Gotta love them puns

CoaV ain't dead mate . I'll continue it once the time is right. Can't be bothered to do it now since there's so little activity at the moment.

Last round! Just general commentary.

Beginning with "As" while later using "as if" is a bit much. Also, there was some verb confusion, going from "ed" to "ing" and using "had" in a present-past moment (that is, everything is taking place in the past, but at the moment, Draf was staring at his handiwork instead of having had already stared at his handiwork).

Meh, you're doing a good job. Really, it's a pain to go too much into grammar. Even I make such simple mistakes. Most of my comments were based off of what my own professors told me. xD

Hey, lookie, you now have 3 new VMS. :3

Hm, I did notice something in the very beginning:
"The knife was out of the table,..."

I think you wanted to say:
"The knife was almost out of the table."

Also, I think these sentences could have been structured differently.

Instead of:
"As Dref had stared at his handiwork and explaining one of the properties of moon metal as if Andrim wasn’t fully aware of it Andrim had walked over to the workbench. Unfastening the hinges on the dagger as the smith talked..."

Try:
"Dref stared at his handiwork and explained one of the properties of moon metal as if Andrim wasn’t fully aware of it. Andrim had walked over to the workbench, unfastening the hinges on the dagger as the smith talked."

*Too lazy to shorten my comments...*

Hi, Befram! Sorry for the (very) late reply! :O ...!

Oh my, your last comment was Xeno's announcement that ToA was being stickied?! I should harass -- I mean, comment on your VMs more often! Actually, the whole mafia should send you more VMs. :O

Yeah, sorry, I find it too hard to "clean out" my PMs. Too many memories, not enough space. :/

Hm, constructive criticism. Sure, I can give it a try! I'll start with your latest post in ToA.

Continued...

Sorry for the long wait, if you look at Takesh's VM, I explain why there was such a delay in my messaging, sorry, I wasn't being ignorant or anything .

I completely agree with you, most dubbed voice acting is down right atrocious, its like they pull a random guy off the street and say "Here, read a few lines for 20 minutes every week and I will pay you for it. Very little in fact, 5 USD an episode!"