Arkaro! plz leave tips or help

O.k ,So first I want anyone that is reading this that it was written by two 14 year olds so it might be a little weird.The reason for me putting this on here for help finding sponsors,getting tips,people to show at least the story on there web sites ,and to get the story out to the public.We are also making a site that i will release as soon as possible.

Story:
Arkaro
"20-years after a great war between the elements."
The earth has become a desolate land with two new elements created by the chaos of the war .Though the elements are divided into kingdoms now,some elements are corrupt and wicked.Demons and other beasts now roam the lands,as the elements strive to find the thing that will make their world whole again...Orichalcon Magnus...

Game-play:
What we have decided on is a simple yet interesting RPG.We are going to make it to were you can customize your own characters and choose between the different elements,like light,dark,water etc.It will probably end up like an anime style graphics game at first.we hope to finish the first copy which will be a single player down loadable game,kind of like our version of a beta then move on to a web-based like runescape if we get enough positive comment on it from player.This will be better than runscape of course.And then after that we hope to make a down loadable version of the online game which will be more broad and open then the previous web-based one.then if it gets big enough we will start to sell it although we know that wont be for quite a while.


That basically sums it up.
Hopefully you liked the story of it,if not please leave suggestions.



although I will be checking this web site as much as possible I would apriciate if any responces were sent to my e-mail which updates me when i get an e-mail,so it will make things easier on me.my e-mail is adamogh@yahoo.com feel free to criticize as you see fit and tell me what ever you think will make for a better story or game.

Thanks for your time.


(I have posted this on some forums before and resived some unnecesary feedback,if at all possible please try to only leave something refering to the game not how i spell or about my age)Thanks