Looking for a few volunteers (readers)

[ApocaRUFF]

I got one volunteer, could use a few more.

[Pwarp]

I need 3-4 people who would be willing to read two and a half chapters of something I am working on. I want to see how they like my writing style, my formatting, and story itself, what age group you think the book is aimed at, etc...

Of course, you would be more than welcome to give whatever feedback you like, but I am looking for certain things.

Basic requirements for this are:
1) Be a reader
2) Like sci-fi AND fantasy
3) Have read/watched, or at least liked the premise of, one of the following: Ready Player One, Epic, Sword Art Online, Legendary Moonlight Sculptor, .Hack//sign OR have a love for sandbox MMORPGs.

What you will be reading is only slightly edited from its rough draft state. Approx word count is 16,000 words, so nothing hefty. Please PM me if you are interested, thank you.

I'll volunteer. Send it my way.

I've been into that genre since I was about 12.

OT: Have you read the Rift series by Raymond feist? It's my favorite book series of all time. If you get a chance look him up. The first book is called Magician Apprentice and there's about 15 or so books in the series. Really a great read.

[ApocaRUFF]

Thank you, Pwarp.


Hoping to expedite this process a bit, if you have a bit of free time, please visit this link and let me know what you think. The feedback I am looking for is stuff like how do you like my writing style? How do you like the theme of the story? Do you think I have done it justice so far? Are you satisfied with the amount of description I am using in the story? Do you want more? Less? How do you like the main character? Do you notice any plot holes, or parts in the plot that just do not make sense?

Thank you for your time. Here is the link.


And here is a picture of the game world. The story takes place on the continent to the left.