Why do you not take any advice from these people? Sure they are mindlessly bashing you at the moment, but the last thread a lot of people provided assistance.
yo if this was more structured this would actually sound pretty tight. I like the idea of it. Still sounds like something id hear in a nightmare though.
Turn the sound down on the bass a tad. You can't hear any of the other sounds over the loudness of it.
Do what you did at 1:00-1:15 and you'll be ballin. The transition was good, the flow was excellent. It was golden at 1:00-1:15. Do what you did there and you'll be straight.