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Cursed Communion
There is a place
Deep in the dark
Abyssal woods
Where creatures
Gather to
Complete dark
Chores for the
Reverend Mother.
Demonic dance
And cursed
Communion
All in the name
Of a dark goddess
And her bedevilled
Satisfaction.
This is for a fantasy story I want to write.
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no offence saint, but im tired of you making random threads with poetry in it, but i do think it would be a good idea to make one official poetry thread were you and others can post there favorites.
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Saints never made a random thread with poetry in it before.. has he? If so I missed it.
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I've made one. before. Sinter is just a little butt hurt over something.Originally Posted by hobosexual
Edit: Oh and stay on topic would you? I want crit.
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Saint is using words I never even heard of yet.
Bedevilled
Communion
god.
But, I still liked it.
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nice...continue your fantasy story but dont make any EMO lines. YOu know what im saying...
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its all about emo
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To be honest, that part sounded like a sentance which you cut up. o_OThere is a place
Deep in the dark
Abyssal woods
Where creatures
Gather to
Complete dark
Chores for the
Reverend Mother.
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Jakuza, a communion is a meeting with a god, deity, or supernatural power. I believe religions do this all the time to pray and stuff.
The word communion reminds me of the short story "Young Goodman Brown" which I read a few years ago. >_> Anyways, is this a poem as a prelude to the story or is the whole story going to be poetry? If this is how the whole storie's going to be, I agree with raiyne that it just sounds like you wrote a sentence and pressed the "enter" key every two words. Maybe if you say it in a spooky voice, it sounds cool, but then again, everything sounds cool in a spooky voice.
EDIT: Yes, it sounds like something under the genre: "Emo". I prefer happy stories. Ice cream cones and falling corn please. And candy.
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