what have I found?

[Necronax]

Agreed.

Also, they need to learn some sentence structure. I saw a lot of repeating of the same words, and some of them were oddly placed as well. And it would really help if they would have built tension at some points instead of coming right out and saying things.

Pretty good overall, though.




*cough*Eragon*cough*

yah I caught the repeated wording a little annoying after the use of the same word 30 times over